Comments on: PD30 Day 13: Writing a Tanka

By: Zita

Zita — Thu, 04 Dec 2008 15:49:36 +0000

Silver Linings

Gently the skies part
to reveal a gleaming edge
against the black day.

I back away from the ledge
and bow down low to pray.

By: Akhristin

Akhristin — Fri, 31 Oct 2008 21:36:33 +0000

full moom arisen
sunlight dances between time
full moon resending

my happiness at day break
amending sleepy a dreams

By: John Hewitt

John Hewitt — Tue, 16 Sep 2008 17:14:25 +0000

Full Moon at Picacho

The moon coasts along
Trailing over and under
The staggered mountains

Passing each car on the bridge
I wonder where we will go

By: Maryellen Grady

Maryellen Grady — Sun, 14 Sep 2008 18:05:43 +0000

Rivulets of rain
Fall to already drenched earth
Green leaves get greener

Rain can’t splash me in my perch
Neither can it help me grow

Maryellen Gradys last blog post..LORD, THERE’S JUST ONE SET OF FOOTPRINTS THANKS TO SARAH PALIN

By: Sheer

Sheer — Sun, 14 Sep 2008 14:50:13 +0000

Changing wind and air
As seasons come and go
As green fades to brown

As the leaves die
I wilt from losing you.

By: Jenn Mercer

Jenn Mercer — Sun, 14 Sep 2008 01:37:35 +0000

Hmm… I haven’t really written any tanka, but I can see how the two lines at the end could really help. I was going to ask if you had heard of cinquains, but when I did a search to confirm the syllable count, your article was the first one that came up .

a clear rippling sheet
of water rolls down the road,
laps at the driveway

a storm the size of Texas
stopped before my mom’s threshold

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hmm… needs work, but a fun experiment.