Comments on: Write the first draft of your poem in paragraph form and then change it into a free verse poem http://www.poewar.com/30-poems-in-30-days-free-verse/ Writing Career Center Sat, 08 Oct 2011 13:49:55 +0000 hourly 1 http://wordpress.org/?v=3.3.1 By: volf (wolf) http://www.poewar.com/30-poems-in-30-days-free-verse/comment-page-1/#comment-222374 volf (wolf) Tue, 07 Apr 2009 13:15:07 +0000 http://www.poewar.com/30-poems-in-30-days-free-verse/#comment-222374 oh i'm kinda new so use small words not big words couse i'm not all that big on words ^_^ but i seem to wright realy good but spelling not so good : ( but on the other hand my say what i right is moveing so if u like to read some i love to post some or send to a email ur choice as long as no one spams me i'm fine with emailing :D but just if i get hack ... no one will hear from me couse what i wright is how mest up my life is and how bad of a life i live so i'ld love to get feed bk and help and u can just call meeh volf or wolf which ever if i trust u u can get my real name but volf adn wolf are the same jsut ones a germen person saying wolf adn the other is me saying wolf XD well hope to hear and get help from some one soon by oh i’m kinda new so use small words not big words couse i’m not all that big on words ^_^ but i seem to wright realy good but spelling not so good : ( but on the other hand my say what i right is moveing so if u like to read some i love to post some or send to a email ur choice as long as no one spams me i’m fine with emailing :D but just if i get hack … no one will hear from me couse what i wright is how mest up my life is and how bad of a life i live so i’ld love to get feed bk and help and u can just call meeh volf or wolf which ever if i trust u u can get my real name but volf adn wolf are the same jsut ones a germen person saying wolf adn the other is me saying wolf XD well hope to hear and get help from some one soon by

]]> By: volf (wolf) http://www.poewar.com/30-poems-in-30-days-free-verse/comment-page-1/#comment-222373 volf (wolf) Tue, 07 Apr 2009 13:05:31 +0000 http://www.poewar.com/30-poems-in-30-days-free-verse/#comment-222373 i want to know if dis is good cuzz i'm haveing trouble it took my friends help to edit and make it work so i'm hopeing it works so i love feed bk i'ld love some one to help i'm kinda young but swearing fine if i like some feed bk or some one can help me i'ld love to get help on dis alot and plz feel free to leave good commets not mest up ones thank you u and have a good day :) errr or night ^_^ and i might give some one my email so that they can help me better : ) and thank u if ur willing to help Life Is Nothing Without You Life is nothing without you, I would be in an eternal abyss without you, I would still be surrounded by darkness By hate. You took me in, Brought me to see the light, See love to hide the side, That would be my end, To be what would be my death. You saved my life. You took me from Death's hands, And brought joy and love. Turned me from dark hate, You will see love. For you I'll show you kindness and I will be forever yours. Forever, my love. I will die for you, I will bleed for you I will trabel anywhere Everywhere. Even to the dark abyss for you To stay by your side forever. For you Until we die Or you get rid of me. end i want to know if dis is good cuzz i’m haveing trouble it took my friends help to edit and make it work so i’m hopeing it works so i love feed bk i’ld love some one to help i’m kinda young but swearing fine if i like some feed bk or some one can help me i’ld love to get help on dis alot and plz feel free to leave good commets not mest up ones thank you u and have a good day :) errr or night ^_^ and i might give some one my email so that they can help me better : ) and thank u if ur willing to help

Life Is Nothing Without You

Life is nothing without you,
I would be in an eternal abyss without you,
I would still be surrounded by darkness
By hate.

You took me in,
Brought me to see the light,
See love to hide the side,
That would be my end,
To be what would be my death.

You saved my life.
You took me from Death’s hands,
And brought joy and love.
Turned me from dark hate,
You will see love.

For you I’ll show you kindness
and I will be forever yours.
Forever, my love.

I will die for you,
I will bleed for you
I will trabel anywhere
Everywhere.
Even to the dark abyss for you
To stay by your side forever.

For you
Until we die
Or you get rid of me.

end

]]> By: Chloe http://www.poewar.com/30-poems-in-30-days-free-verse/comment-page-1/#comment-190043 Chloe Sun, 01 Jun 2008 09:35:52 +0000 http://www.poewar.com/30-poems-in-30-days-free-verse/#comment-190043 RED MARGINS the body that doesn't live up to your expectations it's covered with your juvenile bed sheets you're pouring your heart onto a cheap piece of paper it's red margin unites your emotions, keeps them together, keeps you sane You're in a confused other world, other universe, isolatng you from everyone else breaking through that barrier is the background noise of an ordinary household the talking of nonsense, that doesn't even matter to you anymore the buzzing of a television, which distracts you from reality is this a normal household? I think not this family was not written upon a piece of paper it has no red margin to hold it together it's falling apart, your falling apart RED MARGINS
the body that doesn’t live up to your expectations
it’s covered with your juvenile bed sheets
you’re pouring your heart onto a cheap piece of paper
it’s red margin unites your emotions, keeps them together, keeps you sane
You’re in a confused other world, other universe, isolatng you from everyone else
breaking through that barrier is the background noise of an ordinary household
the talking of nonsense, that doesn’t even matter to you anymore
the buzzing of a television, which distracts you from reality
is this a normal household? I think not
this family was not written upon a piece of paper
it has no red margin to hold it together
it’s falling apart, your falling apart

]]> By: Saul Nadata http://www.poewar.com/30-poems-in-30-days-free-verse/comment-page-1/#comment-188153 Saul Nadata Sun, 25 May 2008 05:31:28 +0000 http://www.poewar.com/30-poems-in-30-days-free-verse/#comment-188153 Where the Twins Are He is quieter, and stiller, and cuddles more. She swivels and laughs. Saul Nadatas last blog post..<a href="http://featuredpoems.blogspot.com/2008/05/where-twins-are.html" rel="nofollow">Where the Twins Are</a> Where the Twins Are

He is quieter,
and stiller, and cuddles more.
She swivels and laughs.

Saul Nadatas last blog post..Where the Twins Are

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]]> By: Rianon Burnet http://www.poewar.com/30-poems-in-30-days-free-verse/comment-page-1/#comment-120878 Rianon Burnet Wed, 03 Oct 2007 13:33:47 +0000 http://www.poewar.com/30-poems-in-30-days-free-verse/#comment-120878 Thank You!! :) Thank You!! :)

]]> By: Rosemary Nissen-Wade http://www.poewar.com/30-poems-in-30-days-free-verse/comment-page-1/#comment-120790 Rosemary Nissen-Wade Tue, 02 Oct 2007 23:53:00 +0000 http://www.poewar.com/30-poems-in-30-days-free-verse/#comment-120790 John: Love your piece about the revolt of the machines! Rianon: I am working my way backwards through the posts today, so am discovering these probably in reverse order to which you posted them. :) Thanks for sharing this one with us. Clearly she was loved by all and you spoke their hearts as well as your own. I love the conversational tone of the ending, "give a good word to God about us" etc. John: Love your piece about the revolt of the machines!

Rianon: I am working my way backwards through the posts today, so am discovering these probably in reverse order to which you posted them. :) Thanks for sharing this one with us. Clearly she was loved by all and you spoke their hearts as well as your own. I love the conversational tone of the ending, “give a good word to God about us” etc.

]]> By: Rianon Burnet http://www.poewar.com/30-poems-in-30-days-free-verse/comment-page-1/#comment-120757 Rianon Burnet Tue, 02 Oct 2007 18:05:15 +0000 http://www.poewar.com/30-poems-in-30-days-free-verse/#comment-120757 John, your a wonderful writer, Rosemary, very inspiring, love it. Here's a little something about an aunt that had passed away: Gone, But not forever Love, cherish, honor, and grace These are just some things you’ve shown us Giving, laughing, and having a good time; All the things you’ve done with your faith Bringing in happiness to a sad party And brightening the room with your smiling eyes Something I’ve always looked forward too Seeing you was not just a want but a need This sea of sadden eyes fall like the sky on a summer’s afternoon But we know we will see you again Although not here on earth; But far away, past the beautiful moon; Love will never falter Her laughter will never cease It will echo through the mountains to the grassy plains As so will everything else about her Thoughts of Diddi will flood my mind She will never be forgotten by anyone A gift was given to us And was touched by everyone; Sometimes the hardest thing; And the right thing is the same Although comprehension is near to nothing The angels will show us to sing I’ve prayed that she wouldn’t leave Knowing that changing the inevitable Is nothing but impossible; Got lifted away to a bright place for eyes to see Loneliness is what we feel’ Happiness fills her body Sorrow and pain attack us In front of God she’ll kneel My heart broke in a million pieces Seeing her get worse and worse; But she was so strong It was, and still is, a blessing to be her niece Just knowing she is standing tall Healthy again; Being in God’s arms She will never again fall She is waiting for us And when it’s our time We will be there With God and Jesus there, a huge plus; But I always still let down tears Because until I can see her again; Thoughts of her have her replaced And also replaced my fears; I love you And you will be in many hearts And since 1 day in heaven is like 1 thousand years on earth We will see you soon God bless And give a good word to God about us To praise God; We will all do our very best. I wrote this for her about a week before she had passed I loved her so much, she died of cancer three months ago. I read this poem at her funeral, everyone seemed to love it and my Uncle George gave out copies to everyone. John,
your a wonderful writer, Rosemary, very inspiring, love it. Here’s a little something about an aunt that had passed away:

Gone, But not forever

Love, cherish, honor, and grace
These are just some things you’ve shown us
Giving, laughing, and having a good time;
All the things you’ve done with your faith
Bringing in happiness to a sad party
And brightening the room with your smiling eyes
Something I’ve always looked forward too
Seeing you was not just a want but a need

This sea of sadden eyes fall like the sky on a summer’s afternoon
But we know we will see you again
Although not here on earth;
But far away, past the beautiful moon;
Love will never falter
Her laughter will never cease
It will echo through the mountains to the grassy plains
As so will everything else about her

Thoughts of Diddi will flood my mind
She will never be forgotten by anyone
A gift was given to us
And was touched by everyone;
Sometimes the hardest thing;
And the right thing is the same
Although comprehension is near to nothing
The angels will show us to sing

I’ve prayed that she wouldn’t leave
Knowing that changing the inevitable
Is nothing but impossible;
Got lifted away to a bright place for eyes to see
Loneliness is what we feel’
Happiness fills her body
Sorrow and pain attack us
In front of God she’ll kneel

My heart broke in a million pieces
Seeing her get worse and worse;
But she was so strong
It was, and still is, a blessing to be her niece
Just knowing she is standing tall
Healthy again;
Being in God’s arms
She will never again fall

She is waiting for us
And when it’s our time
We will be there
With God and Jesus there, a huge plus;
But I always still let down tears
Because until I can see her again;
Thoughts of her have her replaced
And also replaced my fears;

I love you
And you will be in many hearts
And since 1 day in heaven is like 1 thousand years on earth
We will see you soon
God bless
And give a good word to God about us
To praise God;
We will all do our very best.

I wrote this for her about a week before she had passed I loved her so much, she died of cancer three months ago. I read this poem at her funeral, everyone seemed to love it and my Uncle George gave out copies to everyone.

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