Comments on: 30 Poems in 30 Days: Confessional Poetry

By: John Hewitt

John Hewitt — Thu, 22 May 2008 12:59:59 +0000

Saul,

You got a poem in for the day, thats the important thing.

By: Saul Nadata

Saul Nadata — Thu, 22 May 2008 04:39:25 +0000

Apologies. In the limited time I had, I skipped this assignment and wrote the poem below instead.

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Quick Study

You can make of yourself a study on losing.
Something is always slipping away.
It’s never your fault. It’s rarely your choosing.

Who’s to blame? You can walk around accusing
everyone you meet of forcing you to overpay.
You can make of yourself a study on losing

but there are dim prospect there. Abusing
the abusers is a dead end, and who’s to say
it’s never your fault? It’s rarely your choosing

where you start, but how you go about using
what you’ve got determines what, everyday,
you can make of yourself. A study on losing,

a moratorium on kissing, even the act of refusing
present joy and casting your eyes astray:
it’s never your fault. It’s rarely your choosing

until all at once, yes, it is, and you’re capable of amusing
yourself, and one day you wake up with no way
you can make of yourself a study on losing–

but that’s the moment you have something worth losing.
Just–just be careful. Just hold it all close, okay?
It’s never your fault; it’s rarely your choosing;

but is that the line you want to go around reusing,
like those broken men in churches who won’t pray?
You can make of yourself a study on losing.
It’s never your fault. It’s (rarely) your choosing.

Saul Nadatas last blog post..Quick Study

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By: Rianon Burnet

Rianon Burnet — Thu, 04 Oct 2007 13:40:15 +0000

Sorry,
I didn’t realize that it was posted twice, I don’t know what happened.

By: Rosemary Nissen-Wade

Rosemary Nissen-Wade — Wed, 03 Oct 2007 15:34:51 +0000

John: This is so much more powerful, and indeed horrifying, for the lack of extraneous commentary. I guess there are times when all we can do is bear witness. And I do believe it’s important to do so.

By: Rosemary Nissen-Wade

Rosemary Nissen-Wade — Wed, 03 Oct 2007 15:30:15 +0000

Dear Rianon,
Thank YOU! I read it with delight and excitement, feeling how the staccato rhythm reinforced the sense, thinking how well it was working and how it reveals the true poet I’d glimpsed in your other pieces … and then you say it’s for me. What a fabulous gift!

By: Rianon Burnet

Rianon Burnet — Wed, 03 Oct 2007 13:31:49 +0000

Rosemary, Thank you! THis one above is for you.

By: Rianon Burnet

Rianon Burnet — Wed, 03 Oct 2007 13:30:53 +0000

I agree, I really want people to feel what I write, sometimes I guess I just get scared that they will see inside of me and try to distract them with rhyming. You have shown me that it’s good to do so, you told me once that I need to explore other alternatives in my styles of writing. I have and here is one,

Photo Gallery
Frozen;
To look at one’s self;
Cemented;
You come in;
The loving;
The prize;
In front of me;
Singing;

The next;
Your dance
To step;
A hex;
In time;
You’re still;
Movement absorbs me;
Fine;

Step aside;
Some one talks;
Silence broken;
Thoughts stride;
Life is still;
Time stopped;
Beauty exults;
My soul in fill;

A statue of steal;
Screaming;
Almost alive;
Feel;
Bring forth;
The next turn;
A corner;
Art and more;

Exhilarating;
Pounding heart;
Emotions;
Not just a fling;
Everlasting flight;
Yearning;
Craving;
As beautiful as night;

I want more;
Can you feel it;
I dig deeper;
I soar;
Smile;
Frowns;
Indifference;
Beauties;

Feelings mixed;
Confusing thoughts;
Racing;
Bodies fixed;
Pictures move;
Yet unshaken;
Tricks never play;
I’m soothed.

By: Rianon Burnet

Rianon Burnet — Wed, 03 Oct 2007 13:27:45 +0000

Thank you Rosemary, that means allot. I guess sometimes I get scared to really release my true depths without having people focuse on my rhyming. But reading everything that you’ve wrote me, I feel as though I can now. You told me in a different writing that I need to learn to express myself in different styles, I will thank you again. Here is one:

Photo Gallery

Frozen;
To look at one’s self;
Cemented;
You come in;
The loving;
The prize;
In front of me;
Singing;

The next;
Your dance
To step;
A hex;
In time;
You’re still;
Movement absorbs me;
Fine;

Step aside;
Some one talks;
Silence broken;
Thoughts stride;
Life is still;
Time stopped;
Beauty exults;
My soul in fill;

A statue of steal;
Screaming;
Almost alive;
Feel;
Bring forth;
The next turn;
A corner;
Art and more;

Exhilarating;
Pounding heart;
Emotions;
Not just a fling;
Everlasting flight;
Yearning;
Craving;
As beautiful as night;

I want more;
Can you feel it;
I dig deeper;
I soar;
Smile;
Frowns;
Indifference;
Beauties;

Feelings mixed;
Confusing thoughts;
Racing;
Bodies fixed;
Pictures move;
Yet unshaken;
Tricks never play;
I’m soothed.