Comments on: 30 Poems in 30 Days: Collaboration http://www.poewar.com/30-poems-in-30-days-collaboration/ Writing Career Center Fri, 19 Mar 2010 15:32:26 +0000 http://wordpress.org/?v=2.9.2 hourly 1 By: Charles C http://www.poewar.com/30-poems-in-30-days-collaboration/comment-page-1/#comment-221640 Charles C Wed, 07 Jan 2009 02:36:42 +0000 http://www.poewar.com/30-poems-in-30-days-collaboration/#comment-221640 Hey, I've been watching this site for some time now and it's made me start back into poetry recently :) I started this earlier today but I just don't think it's finished, tell me what you think please. "Washed" Unwravled Unfolded Now wrinkled and holded Strained by the fingers and extracted by hands, No contents to comfort But bound on the floor One half at a time Tossed in a pour, Heavy now Soapy now Whirly and spinning and dampened now, Strained by the fingers and extracted by hands. Hey, I’ve been watching this site for some time now and it’s made me start back into poetry recently :)

I started this earlier today but I just don’t think it’s finished, tell me what you think please.

“Washed”

Unwravled
Unfolded
Now wrinkled and holded
Strained by the fingers and extracted by hands,
No contents to comfort
But bound on the floor
One half at a time
Tossed in a pour,
Heavy now
Soapy now
Whirly and spinning and dampened now,
Strained by the fingers and extracted by hands.

]]> By: jacy http://www.poewar.com/30-poems-in-30-days-collaboration/comment-page-1/#comment-219600 jacy Mon, 15 Sep 2008 09:36:47 +0000 http://www.poewar.com/30-poems-in-30-days-collaboration/#comment-219600 after i read what you wright ...i think you are amazing man.for me its hard to learn poem but very its very 'beauty'..and 1st poem I learn is from pearl cheers; <a href="http://acne-laser-surgery-info.blogspot.com/" rel="nofollow">acne laser surgery</a> after i read what you wright …i think you are amazing man.for me its hard to learn poem but very its very ‘beauty’..and 1st poem I learn is from pearl

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]]> By: Saul Nadata http://www.poewar.com/30-poems-in-30-days-collaboration/comment-page-1/#comment-190486 Saul Nadata Tue, 03 Jun 2008 04:25:47 +0000 http://www.poewar.com/30-poems-in-30-days-collaboration/#comment-190486 John, There are myriad sites dedicated to poetic forms online. Probably the most inclusive list is on Wikipedia: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Category:Poetic_form The site below has the best explanations, though it only covers a dozen forms (see links in the header): http://www.baymoon.com/~ariadne/form/triolet.htm Saul Nadatas last blog post..<a href="http://featuredpoems.blogspot.com/2008/06/cost-and-redemption-of-all-things.html" rel="nofollow">The Cost and Redemption of All Things Simple</a> John,

There are myriad sites dedicated to poetic forms online. Probably the most inclusive list is on Wikipedia:
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Category:Poetic_form

The site below has the best explanations, though it only covers a dozen forms (see links in the header):
http://www.baymoon.com/~ariadne/form/triolet.htm

Saul Nadatas last blog post..The Cost and Redemption of All Things Simple

]]> By: John Hewitt http://www.poewar.com/30-poems-in-30-days-collaboration/comment-page-1/#comment-189632 John Hewitt Fri, 30 May 2008 05:59:13 +0000 http://www.poewar.com/30-poems-in-30-days-collaboration/#comment-189632 Saul, I'm glad the series was helpful to you. That is an interesting suggestion. If I can find 30 forms I can write intelligently about, I might give it a try in September. Saul,

I’m glad the series was helpful to you.

That is an interesting suggestion. If I can find 30 forms I can write intelligently about, I might give it a try in September.

]]> By: Saul Nadata http://www.poewar.com/30-poems-in-30-days-collaboration/comment-page-1/#comment-189621 Saul Nadata Fri, 30 May 2008 04:22:22 +0000 http://www.poewar.com/30-poems-in-30-days-collaboration/#comment-189621 John, Just wanted to take a moment to say thank you for the work you put into this project. I found it nice to have someone else choose my direction for 30 days (of 365). Now if you can help out with the other 335... Also, I enjoyed reading many poets I'd never heard of before by following your recommended daily links. An idea for your next poetry series: 30 poetic forms in 30 days. Heck, if you take that on, send me an email. I'll be there on day one. John,

Just wanted to take a moment to say thank you for the work you put into this project. I found it nice to have someone else choose my direction for 30 days (of 365). Now if you can help out with the other 335…

Also, I enjoyed reading many poets I’d never heard of before by following your recommended daily links.

An idea for your next poetry series: 30 poetic forms in 30 days. Heck, if you take that on, send me an email. I’ll be there on day one.

]]> By: Saul Nadata http://www.poewar.com/30-poems-in-30-days-collaboration/comment-page-1/#comment-189151 Saul Nadata Wed, 28 May 2008 15:53:29 +0000 http://www.poewar.com/30-poems-in-30-days-collaboration/#comment-189151 [I'm sorry, John. I see limited reason to penalize words for the number of A's they contain. Take the prior sentence as an example. Would it have been any more useful to write: "I see limited purpose in counting the number of occurrences of one specific letter in every word, like some obsessed orangutan might do"? (I needed the orangutan to get a word in with two A's in it.) Anyway, here's my poem.] Unspoken Grief in a Near-Perfect Marriage Her body grooves to mine, interrupting my sleep, and I hold her, and anticipate the sobs. They come from deep down, where I feel them gathering force against my belly, feel them climbing up her spine and my chest, and I tighten my grip as though I could contain them there, but I can’t, of course. She presses into me as if preparing to launch herself forward just before her throat at last releases. As soon as it starts, the noise ceases. She shifts back against me, gravitating toward my heat, and I contemplate why she always dresses her grief in layers of dark: she won’t complain when the baby is awake, no matter how hard-pressed, though it wouldn’t be tough for her to sell me her grief--it’s never been anything less than real-- and now, awake in the dark, my heart suddenly throbs for her sorrow, and all the solitary hours it must keep. Saul Nadatas last blog post..<a href="http://featuredpoems.blogspot.com/2008/05/house-talk.html" rel="nofollow">House Talk</a> [I'm sorry, John. I see limited reason to penalize words for the number of A's they contain. Take the prior sentence as an example. Would it have been any more useful to write: "I see limited purpose in counting the number of occurrences of one specific letter in every word, like some obsessed orangutan might do"? (I needed the orangutan to get a word in with two A's in it.) Anyway, here's my poem.]

Unspoken Grief in a Near-Perfect Marriage

Her body grooves to mine, interrupting my sleep,
and I hold her, and anticipate the sobs.
They come from deep down, where I feel
them gathering force against my belly,
feel them climbing up her spine and my chest,
and I tighten my grip as though I could contain
them there, but I can’t, of course. She presses
into me as if preparing to launch herself forward
just before her throat at last releases.

As soon as it starts, the noise ceases.
She shifts back against me, gravitating toward
my heat, and I contemplate why she always dresses
her grief in layers of dark: she won’t complain
when the baby is awake, no matter how hard-pressed,
though it wouldn’t be tough for her to sell me
her grief–it’s never been anything less than real–
and now, awake in the dark, my heart suddenly throbs
for her sorrow, and all the solitary hours it must keep.

Saul Nadatas last blog post..House Talk

]]> By: Connie Williams http://www.poewar.com/30-poems-in-30-days-collaboration/comment-page-1/#comment-121450 Connie Williams Sun, 07 Oct 2007 15:58:37 +0000 http://www.poewar.com/30-poems-in-30-days-collaboration/#comment-121450 Nicely done, I am home and am busy working on a review so I will probably not post the final poems, at least not right away. I read some of the new poems at the venue in Clearwater and they were extremely well received. Thank you everyone and especially our leader John. Blessings to all -- Connie Nicely done, I am home and am busy working on a review so I will probably not post the final poems, at least not right away. I read some of the new poems at the venue in Clearwater and they were extremely well received. Thank you everyone and especially our leader John. Blessings to all — Connie

]]> By: Sandra http://www.poewar.com/30-poems-in-30-days-collaboration/comment-page-1/#comment-121326 Sandra Sat, 06 Oct 2007 17:36:02 +0000 http://www.poewar.com/30-poems-in-30-days-collaboration/#comment-121326 Dear John, Rosemary has already stated it so brilliantly that I think any more additional comments like that would be nothing short of superfluous; however, I would like to say this: Thank you so very much for your 30 Poems in 30 Days assignment. I tried to keep up the best I could and will continue writing all 30. I even got some really good ones out of all my scribbling on napkins and typing in between working on my newsletters and memos! : ) Your project unknowingly helped me wade through some pretty rough waters and for that I cannot thank you enough. Rosemary, Connie- Thank you so much as well. Your participation and incredible poetry inspired me beyond words and I feel I have gotten to know some warm kindred spirits in this cold cyber world. Everyone, WRITE ON! Always, Sandra Dear John,
Rosemary has already stated it so brilliantly that I think any more additional comments like that would be nothing short of superfluous; however, I would like to say this: Thank you so very much for your 30 Poems in 30 Days assignment. I tried to keep up the best I could and will continue writing all 30. I even got some really good ones out of all my scribbling on napkins and typing in between working on my newsletters and memos! : ) Your project unknowingly helped me wade through some pretty rough waters and for that I cannot thank you enough.

Rosemary, Connie- Thank you so much as well. Your participation and incredible poetry inspired me beyond words and I feel I have gotten to know some warm kindred spirits in this cold cyber world.

Everyone, WRITE ON!

Always,
Sandra

]]> By: Rosemary Nissen-Wade http://www.poewar.com/30-poems-in-30-days-collaboration/comment-page-1/#comment-121285 Rosemary Nissen-Wade Sat, 06 Oct 2007 11:14:10 +0000 http://www.poewar.com/30-poems-in-30-days-collaboration/#comment-121285 There - they always burst into view the minute I give up waiting and mention the matter! Gremlins.... There – they always burst into view the minute I give up waiting and mention the matter! Gremlins….

]]> By: Rosemary Nissen-Wade http://www.poewar.com/30-poems-in-30-days-collaboration/comment-page-1/#comment-121284 Rosemary Nissen-Wade Sat, 06 Oct 2007 11:12:46 +0000 http://www.poewar.com/30-poems-in-30-days-collaboration/#comment-121284 And if you will be so kind as to rescue my disappeared poem ... :) And if you will be so kind as to rescue my disappeared poem … :)

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