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		<title>By: John Hewitt</title>
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		<dc:creator>John Hewitt</dc:creator>
		<pubDate>Wed, 28 May 2008 15:17:30 +0000</pubDate>
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		<description>One day to go buddy. You&#039;re almost there!</description>
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		<title>By: Saul Nadata</title>
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		<dc:creator>Saul Nadata</dc:creator>
		<pubDate>Wed, 28 May 2008 15:14:46 +0000</pubDate>
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		<description>House Talk

For six months we looked at houses 
like they could talk to us.

A duplex, new construction,
 two blocks from a community garden,
said &lt;i&gt;My builders had extra marble
lying around!  They didnâ€™t want to cart
those heavy slabs back to the warehouse!&lt;/i&gt;
The floors squeaked when we stepped inside,
but we could always walk barefoot.

A cute older cottage on 22nd Street
held some promise, but despite 
the new kitchen, the inspection 
report read, &lt;i&gt;This house is falling down 
around the new kitchen.&lt;/i&gt;
It was on a double lot.  There was plenty
of room for camping outside, as necessary.

The perfect Bungalow home called to us
from a quiet block off Dancy Street.
It called, &lt;i&gt;Iâ€™m way overpriced!&lt;/i&gt;
The next week it called, &lt;i&gt;Iâ€™m taken!&lt;/i&gt;

We placed a bid on a refab on 37th,
a lovely stone affair that resided 
in the flood plain, unsold for some
months, thinking, &lt;i&gt;Time is money.  &lt;/i&gt;
The owners replied,
&lt;i&gt;Money is money too.&lt;/i&gt;

On a cul-de-sac where children play,
we found a beautiful new house 
with a front wall of glass.  
I grew up on a cul-de-sac.
I have many happy memories,
mostly of running away
after well-hit softballs
punctured glass windows.
The house said, &lt;i&gt;Iâ€™m still here.
Youâ€™re still here.  We need each other.&lt;/i&gt;
My wife said, 
&lt;i&gt;I think we should see
other houses.&lt;/i&gt;

For six months we looked at houses 
like they could talk to us.
We carted our baby through the half-packed 
lives of strangers, 
placed her on kitchen floors
with plastic toys to chew on,
and pretended, 
while we watched her,
we were home.

Saul Nadatas last blog post..&lt;a href=&quot;http://featuredpoems.blogspot.com/2008/05/house-talk.html&quot; rel=&quot;nofollow&quot;&gt;House Talk&lt;/a&gt;</description>
		<content:encoded><![CDATA[<p>House Talk</p>
<p>For six months we looked at houses<br />
like they could talk to us.</p>
<p>A duplex, new construction,<br />
 two blocks from a community garden,<br />
said <i>My builders had extra marble<br />
lying around!  They didnâ€™t want to cart<br />
those heavy slabs back to the warehouse!</i><br />
The floors squeaked when we stepped inside,<br />
but we could always walk barefoot.</p>
<p>A cute older cottage on 22nd Street<br />
held some promise, but despite<br />
the new kitchen, the inspection<br />
report read, <i>This house is falling down<br />
around the new kitchen.</i><br />
It was on a double lot.  There was plenty<br />
of room for camping outside, as necessary.</p>
<p>The perfect Bungalow home called to us<br />
from a quiet block off Dancy Street.<br />
It called, <i>Iâ€™m way overpriced!</i><br />
The next week it called, <i>Iâ€™m taken!</i></p>
<p>We placed a bid on a refab on 37th,<br />
a lovely stone affair that resided<br />
in the flood plain, unsold for some<br />
months, thinking, <i>Time is money.  </i><br />
The owners replied,<br />
<i>Money is money too.</i></p>
<p>On a cul-de-sac where children play,<br />
we found a beautiful new house<br />
with a front wall of glass.<br />
I grew up on a cul-de-sac.<br />
I have many happy memories,<br />
mostly of running away<br />
after well-hit softballs<br />
punctured glass windows.<br />
The house said, <i>Iâ€™m still here.<br />
Youâ€™re still here.  We need each other.</i><br />
My wife said,<br />
<i>I think we should see<br />
other houses.</i></p>
<p>For six months we looked at houses<br />
like they could talk to us.<br />
We carted our baby through the half-packed<br />
lives of strangers,<br />
placed her on kitchen floors<br />
with plastic toys to chew on,<br />
and pretended,<br />
while we watched her,<br />
we were home.</p>
<p>Saul Nadatas last blog post..<a href="http://featuredpoems.blogspot.com/2008/05/house-talk.html" rel="nofollow">House Talk</a></p>
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		<title>By: Poetry Writing Tips &#124; Writer's Resource Center</title>
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		<pubDate>Mon, 03 Dec 2007 18:51:32 +0000</pubDate>
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		<title>By: Rosemary Nissen-Wade</title>
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		<dc:creator>Rosemary Nissen-Wade</dc:creator>
		<pubDate>Mon, 08 Oct 2007 06:06:37 +0000</pubDate>
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		<description>Dear WK: bleak indeed! I like the declamatory tone, the way it moves, and the things you have done with sound in the last two lines to make an almost onomatopoeic ending.</description>
		<content:encoded><![CDATA[<p>Dear WK: bleak indeed! I like the declamatory tone, the way it moves, and the things you have done with sound in the last two lines to make an almost onomatopoeic ending.</p>
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		<title>By: Who knew</title>
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		<dc:creator>Who knew</dc:creator>
		<pubDate>Sun, 07 Oct 2007 05:37:10 +0000</pubDate>
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		<description>Wretched fate, inhuman circumstance,
Fatherless boys, a soul mate gone

So much to so many 
Now taken away.

Barren and cold is this new world,
A bleak adaptation of its former vitality

Morning breaks now, not with a song,
But with a sob.</description>
		<content:encoded><![CDATA[<p>Wretched fate, inhuman circumstance,<br />
Fatherless boys, a soul mate gone</p>
<p>So much to so many<br />
Now taken away.</p>
<p>Barren and cold is this new world,<br />
A bleak adaptation of its former vitality</p>
<p>Morning breaks now, not with a song,<br />
But with a sob.</p>
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		<title>By: Rosemary Nissen-Wade</title>
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		<dc:creator>Rosemary Nissen-Wade</dc:creator>
		<pubDate>Thu, 04 Oct 2007 23:44:53 +0000</pubDate>
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		<description>BURST OUT SINGING


you always
why do you always
on these journeys
at this point

so startling
sudden
lift me up
shining

like spray in the face
tingling
jewel-blue
ocean over Banora


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I actually got the last two lines first. They were one at that stage.

This is a bit different from how I&#039;ve been writing of late. I&#039;m conscious of having been influenced by Rianon and Pearl â€“ which will probably shock them both, as they are so different from each other and this is not an imitation of either. Also it would have been influenced by the fact that I was reading Lorca for the &quot;inspiration&quot; assignment.</description>
		<content:encoded><![CDATA[<p>BURST OUT SINGING</p>
<p>you always<br />
why do you always<br />
on these journeys<br />
at this point</p>
<p>so startling<br />
sudden<br />
lift me up<br />
shining</p>
<p>like spray in the face<br />
tingling<br />
jewel-blue<br />
ocean over Banora</p>
<p>&#8212;&#8212;&#8212;&#8212;&#8212;&#8212;&#8212;&#8212;&#8212;&#8212;&#8212;&#8212;-</p>
<p>I actually got the last two lines first. They were one at that stage.</p>
<p>This is a bit different from how I&#8217;ve been writing of late. I&#8217;m conscious of having been influenced by Rianon and Pearl â€“ which will probably shock them both, as they are so different from each other and this is not an imitation of either. Also it would have been influenced by the fact that I was reading Lorca for the &#8220;inspiration&#8221; assignment.</p>
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		<title>By: John Hewitt</title>
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		<dc:creator>John Hewitt</dc:creator>
		<pubDate>Wed, 03 Oct 2007 23:00:15 +0000</pubDate>
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		<description>Thank you Riannon and Rosemary. My day today is crazy, and tomorrow may not be much better, but by Friday I look forward to sitting down and reading everyone&#039;s newest poems.</description>
		<content:encoded><![CDATA[<p>Thank you Riannon and Rosemary. My day today is crazy, and tomorrow may not be much better, but by Friday I look forward to sitting down and reading everyone&#8217;s newest poems.</p>
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		<title>By: Rosemary Nissen-Wade</title>
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		<dc:creator>Rosemary Nissen-Wade</dc:creator>
		<pubDate>Wed, 03 Oct 2007 22:26:44 +0000</pubDate>
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		<description>Rianon: This heartfelt piece would fit quite well with the assignment on repetition! (Well, they are both heartfelt, but I was meaning your second one above.)

John: This really says it all about married love, which encompasses contradictions and duty and other commitments and the dailiness of life and just plain tiredness ... and remains steadfast. Which is in fact much like the Biblical definition of &quot;charity&quot;. You&#039;ve created all that on the page (er, screen) at least for this reader.</description>
		<content:encoded><![CDATA[<p>Rianon: This heartfelt piece would fit quite well with the assignment on repetition! (Well, they are both heartfelt, but I was meaning your second one above.)</p>
<p>John: This really says it all about married love, which encompasses contradictions and duty and other commitments and the dailiness of life and just plain tiredness &#8230; and remains steadfast. Which is in fact much like the Biblical definition of &#8220;charity&#8221;. You&#8217;ve created all that on the page (er, screen) at least for this reader.</p>
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		<title>By: Rianon Burnet</title>
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		<dc:creator>Rianon Burnet</dc:creator>
		<pubDate>Wed, 03 Oct 2007 20:30:20 +0000</pubDate>
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		<description>I Hope It Isn&#039;t Too Late

Your my color 
I&#039;m only half a body
without you
my tears are empty
If you don&#039;t touch me
what&#039;s the use
my clossets full of clothes
that I&#039;ll never wear

I&#039;m not fat free
but only 125 lbs
I&#039;m not a beauty
but your girl next door
your my only friend
my best friend
your my only paper
my diary

Without you
I&#039;m nothing
without you this place
looks like a grave yard
my words mean nothing
if your not the ears listening
my life is full of people 
but your the only one

I hope it hasn&#039;t been too long
my heart is unfernished
no one knows me
like you know me
I just hope it isn&#039;t too late
to say I want you
to say I love you
to say I&#039;m nothing without you

Please don&#039;t forsake me
stay with me
don&#039;t let me go
don&#039;t watch me stray
I&#039;m on my knees
I&#039;m in the dirt, the grime
my tears are dark
my body messed

I&#039;m desheveled and empty
I just hope it isn&#039;t too late
to say I want you
to say I love you
to say I&#039;m nothing without you

I hope it isn&#039;t too late :(</description>
		<content:encoded><![CDATA[<p>I Hope It Isn&#8217;t Too Late</p>
<p>Your my color<br />
I&#8217;m only half a body<br />
without you<br />
my tears are empty<br />
If you don&#8217;t touch me<br />
what&#8217;s the use<br />
my clossets full of clothes<br />
that I&#8217;ll never wear</p>
<p>I&#8217;m not fat free<br />
but only 125 lbs<br />
I&#8217;m not a beauty<br />
but your girl next door<br />
your my only friend<br />
my best friend<br />
your my only paper<br />
my diary</p>
<p>Without you<br />
I&#8217;m nothing<br />
without you this place<br />
looks like a grave yard<br />
my words mean nothing<br />
if your not the ears listening<br />
my life is full of people<br />
but your the only one</p>
<p>I hope it hasn&#8217;t been too long<br />
my heart is unfernished<br />
no one knows me<br />
like you know me<br />
I just hope it isn&#8217;t too late<br />
to say I want you<br />
to say I love you<br />
to say I&#8217;m nothing without you</p>
<p>Please don&#8217;t forsake me<br />
stay with me<br />
don&#8217;t let me go<br />
don&#8217;t watch me stray<br />
I&#8217;m on my knees<br />
I&#8217;m in the dirt, the grime<br />
my tears are dark<br />
my body messed</p>
<p>I&#8217;m desheveled and empty<br />
I just hope it isn&#8217;t too late<br />
to say I want you<br />
to say I love you<br />
to say I&#8217;m nothing without you</p>
<p>I hope it isn&#8217;t too late <img src='http://www.poewar.com/wp-includes/images/smilies/icon_sad.gif' alt=':(' class='wp-smiley' /> </p>
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		<title>By: Rianon Burnet</title>
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		<dc:creator>Rianon Burnet</dc:creator>
		<pubDate>Wed, 03 Oct 2007 20:11:52 +0000</pubDate>
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		<description>I feel drained and stripped of my cloths. I feel as though I could cry. I keep on reading your poem John and I sometimes I feel just like that girl. Sometimes I feel empty or in this case drained. Like it&#039;s too late, it&#039;s too late to give. I have a poem that I wrote about this. But it doesn&#039;t fit with anyone of the lessons, I&#039;ll put it here so that you can read it.</description>
		<content:encoded><![CDATA[<p>I feel drained and stripped of my cloths. I feel as though I could cry. I keep on reading your poem John and I sometimes I feel just like that girl. Sometimes I feel empty or in this case drained. Like it&#8217;s too late, it&#8217;s too late to give. I have a poem that I wrote about this. But it doesn&#8217;t fit with anyone of the lessons, I&#8217;ll put it here so that you can read it.</p>
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